TLC by Chrouya
Script:	 Hentai Ouji 03 [tl][timed][edit]
Workraw: Hentai Ouji_03_10bit

{I'd change the -sama in the signs as "Miss Azuki Azusa"}

1
Azuki Azusa is not a pure fairy, but just another girl.
Azuki Azusa is not an innocent fairy, but just an ordinary girl.
{alternative}

5
But I was only looking to get my facade back, as if I was playing some game and just observing some parameter{looking only at her exterior}. {tlc check - tl in brackets}
But I was only looking to get my facade back, as if I was only looking at my raw stats when playing a role-playing game.
{I believe this is the context for parameters. I used this for reference}
{http://www.paradisearmy.com/doujin/pasok_parameter.htm}

18
You didn't trick me, {\i1}I{\i0} tricked {\i1}you{\i0}.
You didn't trick me, {\i1}I{\i0} had {\i1}myself{\i0} get tricked.
{so tsundere}

19
I don't want to get all friendly with you.
It's me who doesn't want to get all friendly with you.
{more contrast in her speech}

28
But I think she's happy, having two of her friends come over.
But I think she's happy, having {\i1}two{\i0} of her friends come over.
{mom puts emphasis that 2! friends came over, not just one}

36
I don't think we will ever get along again. {tlc - any better way to cut the line off like she does?}
And I don't think that will ever change...
{My suggestion is that you take over the context of the previous line and continue with this liberally, if you want the dots in}

41
So did you also know that I was just thinking about how your lips look really alluring, shining from the oil from the meat buns?
So did you also know that I was just thinking about how your lips look alluring due to the meat juice?
{I thought that this line was written way too long}

53
you'd hide the video with girls you really wanted to rent between the classic masterpieces you chose due to your facade. {tlc - is porn or m-rated videos a reasonable substitute?}
you'd fool people by hiding gravure videos chosen with your real feelings between the classic masterpieces chosen with your facade.
{this is how I'd phrase it, but perhaps the line is getting too long now}

54
Otherwise, you'd end up as a pervert who rented several videos with women in a single day.
Otherwise, you'd end up as a pervert who rented countless gravure videos in a single day.
{fixing some words}

56
Besides, you've been a pervert for a while now.
Besides, you've been a pervert for as long as I know.
{I feel like this should be written more in this context}


60
Just do as you say.
Just try and do as you say.
{line is really short for the assigned time}
{ ==> Just try and let your mouth lead you into action.}

76
Azuki Azusa had been absent from school, and the girls told her that the school trip had been planned for Hokkaido.
The girls told Azuki Azusa, who's usually absent from school, that the school trip's destination was Hokkaido.
{This is the correct sentence structure}

78
We didn't want to hurt her. She did say that she liked the Ezo red fox.
We didn't mean any harm. She did say things like being fond of Ezo red foxes.
{alternative phrasing I'd recommend.}

108
You call that habit of yours, 'reward time', and raise the hurdle when looking for certain traits in people. {tlc}
Nevertheless, the hurdle gets even more raised when looking for certain traits in people through this 'reward time'.
{sonokuse = nevertheless}

109
You're an idiot, even though your name is cute.
You're an idiot.
110
You're just putting on airs that you don't need.
Although you're cute, you're just putting on airs that you don't need.
{this needs retiming , so 110 includes [ji ga kawaii kuse ni]}

124
Dunno.
Not really.
125
I don't know if I feel anything romantic towards you.
I don't really see you as a love interest or anything.
{he's not questioning, just upright honest}


192
That feels wrong, somehow.
Isn't that kinda wrong, somehow?
{it's a question}

230
No! I thought we could go to Okinawa or something
No! I thought of Okinawa or something...
{A little shorter. and some dots.}

263
I wsn't talking about that.
--> a

306
You don't have to put on your facade for my sake. {You don't have to worry about me.} {tlc}
{This is okay to me}

311
I think I'll just support the team from the sidelines.
I think I'll just operate from behind the scenes for now.
{she's in that child warfare club, not a soccer team}